Re: [tlug] Linux Format magazine

[Josh Glover <jmglov@example.com>]

On 29/01/06, Lyle (Hiroshi) Saxon <ronfaxon@example.com> wrote:

> I felt that the first two paragraphs were a bit choppy and needing
> attention, so I turned my fingers loose on the keyboard and came up with
> the following.  While I made many changes to the first two paragraphs, I
> completely left the last two alone.

I liked your first paragraph, and edited it a little to come up with
revision 3 (patch attached). I did not feel that your reorganisation
of the second paragraph was particularly effective (notwithstanding
the Eric S. Raymond == ESR mondai! ;), but it did give me an idea or
two.

The third revision is now up at:

http://www.tlug.jp/docs/linux-format_2006-01.txt

Hey, we're down to 274 words!

Cheers,
Josh

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